Assignment 11

Part 2

I didn't get to see the feedback from my group due to illness, but I still can give slight revisions from what I saw re-reading my paper. The main areas I believe I need to work on are with my paragraphs (I need to put all the material I have into them so they can be finished), direct quoting more sources with maybe including something such as a block quote, gaining further sources for the world's perspective view on my paper, and make a strong intro and conclusion to set my paper apart. I need to focus on exactly how I want my paper to flow without making it seem cluttered; I'll do this by using better and smoother transitions from paragraph to paragraph. As for developing my ideas, it all comes down to finding other perspectives on 9/11 as in, from other cultures besides ours and Muslims; which is turning out to be harder than I thought. I want to find maybe the Chinese or Japanese and also like Europeans.

Part 3 

The main purpose I want to state is that I will elaborate on the world’s perspective of 9/11 and look into the belief of conspiracy theories surrounding the attack. I will also look into how this tragic event changed not only how Americans view different cultures, but how all cultures around the world view each other; religious views are tied into this as well. It's important because this is what my paper is based on and not stating the purpose will give readers no direction when going over it. I tried to use as much peer-reviewed journals I could find because then I know it's scholarly and came from some study or professor, etc. that knows what they're talking about and the information is and can be completely proven. I'm going to look for cultural related sources for my next draft and therefore, I'll be seeking some kind of article that relates but not from a newspaper source. I need these views so I can finish my main purpose for this paper, so they will be of extreme importance (this is the backbone of my essay). I've set up my sources dealing with my main purpose and then going down the line from there to my last purpose; from perspective ideas I thought this would be best. In order to fully get the perspective of my sources, I need to relate to them in a way i can fully understand and then by doing that, I'll be able to give the best perspective I possibly can.